erm.... it was okay, but a bit of a crock of unrealistic badassery.
I'd like to know if this land your grew up in is adjacent to Stalgath? is it across the seas form it? you are going to be in Stalgath once you are whitleisted so how are you in Stalgath, why did you come here etc?
Overall acceptable but please remeber this is more how you character will act in Stalgath and go about inside it's borders. Yours right now remain strange as technically you have said you stillcurrently reside in your home lands.... so how will you be whitelisted and pop up in Stalgath?